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Post by Phaerae on Mar 24, 2010 6:57:01 GMT -5
No, that's perfectly fine! After all, you don't want to spam "/em stares around her with the rapt attention of the very young and fascinated".
Behavior is fine - so long as it's something your character does constantly. You don't tell people about your character's personality - you show them behavioral quirks that may imply personality traits.
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Post by Spiritusrex on Mar 24, 2010 9:58:28 GMT -5
Would really like some feedback on the one I've written up. However, I lack the technical expertise to paste it into the window it seems. Could somebody please provide instruction on how to post the RSP character profile in a thread? Thanks a bunch.
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Post by wabashaw on Mar 24, 2010 12:59:01 GMT -5
You could either just mark it all (ctrl+A) and copy it (CTRL+C) then paste it all in here (CTRL+V) or screenie it (print screen) and paste it into Paint and save it as a jpeg.
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Post by Spiritusrex on Mar 24, 2010 20:29:18 GMT -5
Thanks for the info. Please let me know your thoughts, recommended changes, etc. I am new to the RP thing (although most of my characters are from Kirin Tor, an RP realm - go figure) so I am certainly looking for constructive criticism. Had to use the jpeg attachment approach as a paste option was not available (or, honestly, was beyond my grasp) so I apologize in advance for the size of the profile. Attachments:
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Post by wabashaw on Mar 24, 2010 23:28:03 GMT -5
I love it! Perhaps the last reveals a bit too much, but that's nitpicking. This is tons better than most flagRSP descriptions I've seen around!
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Post by Spiritusrex on Mar 25, 2010 8:44:25 GMT -5
I love it! Perhaps the last reveals a bit too much, but that's nitpicking. This is tons better than most flagRSP descriptions I've seen around! Thank you so much for the kind words. Well, I guess I'm off to begin the experience
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Post by standing on Mar 25, 2010 9:41:47 GMT -5
my other characters.
Troll Shaman Kinjah A rather determined looking young troll of average height.
Orc Warrior Krommoth Low browed and wearing a scrubby beard, at first glance Krommoth looks rather slow, even for an Orc. He seems preoccupied, frequently muttering some internal conversation to himself.
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Post by Rhii on Mar 26, 2010 2:01:28 GMT -5
No, that's perfectly fine! After all, you don't want to spam "/em stares around her with the rapt attention of the very young and fascinated". Behavior is fine - so long as it's something your character does constantly. You don't tell people about your character's personality - you show them behavioral quirks that may imply personality traits. Would anyone notice from her description (and crazy awesome last name) that she's left-handed?
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Post by Phaerae on Mar 26, 2010 3:35:18 GMT -5
She could also be ambidextrous. =P
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Post by Rhii on Mar 26, 2010 15:25:07 GMT -5
She could! She definitely dual wields!
(However, she's a lefty. I don't know why... she just is)
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Post by pilfkin on Mar 28, 2010 12:38:45 GMT -5
Mine is:
"Though she does not seem particularly confident or eager to make eye contact, Pilfkin walks with a stright back and her head held high - possibly as a result of childhood deportment lessons.
Whilst her robes rarely have an expensive sheen, or ornate decoration, they always appear to be in good condition and are carefully pressed. She wears a plain silver necklace around her throat but no other jewellery is visible.
From her belt hangs a small silver compact and she regularly brushes the power it contains across her face, trying, it seems, to cover the freckles which dot her nose and cheeks."
I hope it's not too Mary-Sue!! Critique welcome and appreciated...
Pilf x
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Post by hadawako on Mar 28, 2010 14:45:44 GMT -5
Mine is: "Though she does not seem particularly confident or eager to make eye contact, Pilfkin walks with a stright back and her head held high - possibly as a result of childhood deportment lessons. Whilst her robes rarely have an expensive sheen, or ornate decoration, they always appear to be in good condition and are carefully pressed. She wears a plain silver necklace around her throat but no other jewellery is visible. From her belt hangs a small silver compact and she regularly brushes the power it contains across her face, trying, it seems, to cover the freckles which dot her nose and cheeks." I hope it's not too Mary-Sue!! Critique welcome and appreciated... Pilf x I like it. It's not remotely Mary Sue (unless that's a description of you, anyway!).
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Post by Rhii on Mar 28, 2010 15:59:38 GMT -5
Even if it is you, you could be an interesting RP character as long as you don't let it become your wish-fulfillment self... At least, that's my understanding from other RP venues. I've found it interesting to RP as a character based directly off of myself, as long as I'm honest about the way I really might react in similar situations. It's kind of revealing though!
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Post by pilfkin on Mar 28, 2010 16:15:19 GMT -5
My initial response: Gods no - she isn't me On reflection: She has some elements of me (not the description mind you that's a mix of a few people I know) but I guess however careful you are with your characters some element of you is fairly likely to creep in? Or not... I don't know. But thanks for giving me confidence that at leat my FlagRSP is unilkely to make people point and laugh at me!
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Post by bullcopra on Apr 12, 2010 0:43:24 GMT -5
Erm... so everyone has FlagRSP... I have MyRolePlay, so do they understand each other?
Would hate to change, because my other (RPPVP) project uses MRP...
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